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The screaming at the end is meant to overlap the spoken parts, the parts in brackets are meant to be whispered while I’m singing the lyrics before it. I can imagine this sounding sort of like a flyleaf song.
This song is pretty heartfelt, I just wanted to get my emotions and confusion out there, at the time i didn’t really care about how good the actual lyrics were. I’m pretty interested in other people’s opinions on my lyrics though, so don’t be a stranger (: please answer

I used to love you (I used to love you)
I used to be part of your body
Am I still tainted by your touch
Is my soul still chained to you, or have you set it free?

I used to love you (i used to love Satan, i used to love you Satan)
Your prophets told me you would let me go
But I could never walk back through hell’s gate
I want to see myself in the mirror again, I want my fate

I WANT MY FATE (Lacey Mosley style scream)
Does it belong to a set of horns
Forevermore said the raven
Forevermore
Lies i told his black beak
LIES (LM style scream)

Apparently you’ve poisoned me
You’ve stolen my bloodstream
and my once pleasant dreams
They’ve told me they’re covered in grime
They’re filthy from your hands

my mind was falling apart, i was so frail
and my emotions were so unused they became stale
i turned to you for solace,
I needed comfort in misery, you gave me a reason to loathe others
you gave me a will that nearly killed me

I WANT MY FATE (lacey mosley style scream)
Does it belong to a set of horns
Forevermore said the raven
Forevermore
Lies i told his black beak
LIES (LM style scream)

I still hear your whispers in my ear
You fed me twisted fibs through a misty mind
Did you use my vulnerability against me?
I used to think you were the answer and my Lord
I mistrusted Him, the rightful Lord
You whispered to me,
he only wanted malice for me.
he only wanted torment
I believed you
I couldn’t see the black veil before my eyes

I WANT MY FATE (lacey mosley style scream)
Does it belong to a set of horns
Forevermore said the raven
Forevermore
Lies i told his black beak
LIES (LM style scream)
never again will I
LIES
run from you Lord
LIES
Please forgive me
Please welcome me
LIES
back to you (LIES)
and back to your sweet embrace

I can’t do this alone.

Thanks for answering
much appreciated (:

Awesome!

You should check out http://www.songcrypt.com

There are people in the forums that will give you some honest criticism to help you fine tune this song or if you have no plans of reproducing this you might be able to post it to the site for others to perform. Who know if someone selects it you might even earn some cash…

My 10 year old German Shephard appears to have his inner eyelid partially covering his eyes. His left eye is also becoming completely misty. Is this a sign of infection or just a sign of old age. Please advise

It’s a condition called ‘cherry eye’ If it isn’t too severe, the vet can treat it medically. If it is severe (it is a prolapsed eyelid caused by infection, the vet will have to do minor surgery. It will NOT get better without treatment!!!

Papaw

Its kinda a song/poem not sure yet
its horror-pop genre, its about a Succubus of course
yea what do u think lots of comments please guys
Thanks.

Song Name - Succubus stare

You forged the right to bring me down
When shall we decide to end the chaos
I praise the day you set your eyes on me
For I shall come alive once more
A flood of humans screaming into the
Hallway moving with abandon like bats out of
An empty wardrobe
we spent some time down in Lakewood
In the misty fields, we picked blue roses
I spray of dissention, a trickle of water
ours eyes tremble, this began as your surprise
sea of starry-eyed jailbait filled my view,
her eyes boring into the seduced men
with a succubus stare.
tension filled the atmosphere. on the verge of spontaneous
eruption echoed through The cathedral
No backdoor offered us a silent escape
We’d have to manage the gauntlet at the gates

Awesome!

You should check out http://www.songcrypt.com

There are people in the forums that will give you some honest criticism to help you fine tune this song or if you have no plans of reproducing this you might be able to post it to the site for others to perform. Who know if someone selects it you might even earn some cash…

I turned these in for my "creative writing class" and the teacher commented that they weren’t really good. I use to really love to write, but that class is starting to make me nervous about my writing skill.

Fade
This world is filled with beautiful things,
Oceans and blue skies, breathless creatures,
We’re covered by the colors of rainbow,
But somehow everything seems to fade away,
Darkness steals everything,
One day, maybe we’ll be cover in ashes,
Blown away with the wind,
Heart beats, breathe slowly, feel the misty rain,
Do you know that one day; we’ll all disappear, no
I can’t live forever; I can’t wait here forever,
I won’t be here to hold you forever,
Don’t be sad, I’ll always love you,
Nothing seems real,
Everything feels like a dream, a nightmare where you run,
You run and run, but you’re going nowhere,
You scream, but there are only silent, empty eyes,
Hush now, I wish that you can see what I see,
Feel the pain and lonely, that I endure every day,
But you’ll never understand me,
I walk among you, can’t tell facts from fiction,
We’re all so fragile, so unprotected and pitiful,
Every soul hide’s their own tear,
Nobody knows what we are,
So much confusion, we must all follow,
Put on a mask and step outside,
Loneliness chews us inside out,
Good and evil, we’re surrounded,
I just want to close my eyes and wish it all away,
What do we live for, to rebel,
To run free, to love, only to suffer at the end,
I’m so afraid of all good things, coming to an end,
If everything else is only a illusion,
When all perish, my love for you will live on,

Black Spider web
Charming smiles, friendly eyes,
One by one, they’re all invited,
Come on in, see her face, she is so nice,
All flaws are accepted, all past are forgiven,
She understands you,
She’ll bring you into the wonders of the night,
Go on, follow her, you don’t have a choice,
Oh, she is so special, she loves you so,
She is so trustworthy; she listens to your stories,
Then slowly, she spins silver strings around you,
Sharp needles and string,
She pierces through your skin,
She sings to you the lullabies of death,
Prick your little fingers and toes,
She smiles and steps on your back,
She nails you onto the dirt,
Oh, sweet, sweet memories are so far,
Yet, you could taste them on your tongue,
Such a beautiful future, you’ve envisioned,
Open your eyes,
In front of you lie,
A cold blood sucker,
She drain you of life,
Struggling on the center of a web,
Oh, look, look at her face now,
Such a friendly face, such a disgusting disguise,
Stand aside and watch the others,
As she smiles and waves them in,
The poor victims, though they long to kill her,
They smile at her appearances,
wow, i’ve never expected such "profession" critits,
i’m actually looking for rather if it is good or not, like is it passion enough.
Well i’m still young and improving,
I guess my writing is more for teens.

Now, with the disclaimer that I’m not a huge free-verse enthusiast to begin with, these aren’t horrible, but they’re pretty bland. There’s no steady rhythm or rhyme scheme, the imagery is better in the second, but still nothing really original, and the comma on the end of the final line as on each and every line before it only lampshades the fact that they don’t come to a strong conclusion so much as peter out into a repeat of what’s already been said.

For rhythm, try speaking the poem out loud and changing the words until you can practically hear it sing. The best rappers are great modern-day poets, when it comes to flow. Try listening to a few if you need practice figuring out how to maintain a rhythm. Generally, you want each line to have a similar number of syllables. Repeated emphases in similar places on similar lines will help get you there, and assonance and consonance can help turn prose into poetry as well. Rhyme should be easy enough.

For imagery, try to get beyond what everyone thinks of as metaphors for death, love, betrayal, and pretty facades. Try to take an ordinary object and ascribe meaning to it, or take the classic images down to their smallest details and mix them with other stock symbols in ways that wouldn’t normally go together. T. S. Elliot used prickly pears and teaspoons, Sylvia Plath used boots and bees, and if we started trying to summarize the tripped-out imagery in your average Beck song, we’d be here all day.

Combining both the previous ideas with a clear theme in the back of your mind and the humble period will hopefully allow you to create poetry with a stronger impact.

this is a question for my dad he is worried he is worried about his eye site what is it his eyes seam misty,cant see clearly

he could be developing cataracts.
here learn all about it:
http://www.webmd.com/eye-health/cataracts/cataracts-topic-overview

he should make an appointment with an ophthalmolgist to get it checked out and if it is a cataract they will discuss his surgical options (cataracts often occur as people age the the surgery to fix it is relatively routine and carries few risks)

he doesn’t have to have surgery right away or anything he can hold off for as long as he wants.

These Are For A Song Protesting Against War & Nuclear Weapons;

Open Your Eyes
Copyright B.Richard Davies 2009

Feeling Sudden Pain,
Voices Screaming In My Head,
Loved Ones Lost,
All The Good Times Dead.

Dark Surrounds My World,
A Wall Of Lost Solitude,
Although I Run Away,
The Pain Won’t See Me Through.

Giving The Vital Drug,
It’s Too Late To Save Them,
They Once Were My Friends,
Now Death Defeats Them.

Open Your Eyes!
To The Hell That Lives Around You,
Live The Perfect Lie,
Whilst Shadows Drop Around You,
When Life’s Near The End.

Never Speak Those Words,
Words Of Bloody Hell,
What You Say,
No Consequence At All.

Fell The Broken Silence,
Then The Deed Is Done.

Once My Friends,
Now All They Are Gone.

Ask Me What Matters,
For Nothing Matters True.

I Don’t Care,
What They Do To You.

As If You Would Care At All,
The Dark Will Never Fall.

You Wouldn’t Know Anyway,
To Be So Ignorant And Throw It All Away.

Open Your Eyes!
To The Hell That Surrounds You,
Live The Perfect Life,
Whilst Shadows Rise Around You,
When Life’s Near The End.

As If You Would Care,
You Wouldn’t Know Anyway,
To Be So Bloody Ignorant,
To Throw It All Away.

As The Embers Burn In My Heart,
I Lose ALL Hope Of Living,
As I Look Away,
My Heart To Cease It’s Beating,
The Fire In My Eyes Is Out,
To Never Be Loved,
Or Live A Life,
To Take It From Me.

Open Your Eyes,
To My Pain And Screaming,
Shut Your Eyes,
The Hate That I’m Still Feeling,
When It’s Near The End,
The Shadows All Live,
These Wall’s Can’t Guard You,
You’ll Go One Day Soon.

Eyes Open,
Eyes Open,
Living Life With Open Eyes,
Live The World Around You,
Eyes Open,
Eyes Open,
OPEN YOUR EYES!

Open My Eyes,
Now I See Your Evil,
Live The Impending Life,
Whilst Shadows Rise Around You,
When It’s Near The Breaking,
All That Really Matters,
Watch Me Live In Shame,
Your Crystal World Will Shatter.

Wake Me To Die,
The End Is Near,
I Feel It In My Heart,
Whisper In My Ear.

Eyes A Misty Blue,
About To See The Horror,
The Way That It All Ends,
The Way I Fall.

Open Your Eyes,
Now We See Your Evil,
Live The Dead Life,
Whilst Shadows Rise Around You,
When It’s Near The Breaking,
All That Really Matters,
Watch Me Die In Shame,
So Won’t You Open Your Eyes.

good one (Y)

we have a garter snake in our bilolgy class and I was wondering why

When a snake is getting ready to shed its skin, a fluid is produced between the old skin and the new one forming underneath to help with the process of sloughing. This is what makes the snake’s eyes look cloudy - the eyes are covered by transparent scales, through which you can see the fluid. The snake’s eyesight is reduced at this time.

Okay so I kinda want too know which of my pieces are better, help? (:

Sorry if they suck…

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Okay guys, thanks for reading. I know there are quite a bit of errors. Its because my keyboard is a bit messed up and I was typing pretty fast. I dont have Spell Check yet, so bare with me kay? When reading these dont freak out over some of the dramatic ones such as number 28. Good writers put thierselves in different situations and has different point of views. In alot of these poems, etc. i was trying too channel something different. Im sorry if many of them suck. I tryed too write as much as I could each day. Thankyou for reading. And please let me know if something needs too be revised or edited. Let me know what you think. Feedback is great.
xoxo, Shellbee.
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1.
For it had us all prisoner
we followed the trap
that reformed us,
recreated us,
stole from us our origonality,
all of us.
It led us too a new world,
a world eager
and hungry
for change,
for "improvement"
It colonized us.
It dignified us.
Taught us
to all be alike
the same.
Yet we seem too worship it…
and we have an addiction for it,
a need for it.
We cant stop it
unless we put a stop to our thinking…
By: Shelby Smith
1:03 October 5,2009
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2.
I whisper your name
through the misty night
to the cold chills
that flow throughout the cold morning air
to the echo
of silence that is no longer inprisoned
to the harmonizing crickets
the humming birds
and the hollow tree
waving so free
to the honey bees up so high
even too the dark blue sky
12:58 October 5, 2009
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3.

I closed my eyes
and droplets
of fear
love
hatred
even confusion
had slowly shed
from my blue eyes
and my disgise
that had secretly bluffed
when i told you i dont care anymore
was revealed
12:45 October 5,2009
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4.

I tell myself,
remind myself
of my regrets
of what i had said,
and now thier more & more
than ever before
12:32 October 5, 2009
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5.

When I hear your voice
When i see your eyes
when i hear your laugh
just when im around you
i consistantly wonder
how you do it,
how you can make me feel good on a day so bad
but maybe the mystery is the magic
10:45 October 3, 2009
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6.
a spider,
Gracefully
carefully
trinkling on its web
paciently awaiting for its prey
what is it thinking right now?
what
how
does it feel?
Maybe its trying to unravel the mysteries
of life as we are
maybe its daydreaming
or maybe its so much more
more than life itself
and we are the simple ones
10:36 October 3, 2009
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7.
Change.
It happens
Its there
We cant stop it
We cant prevent it
We cant hide from it
Were stuck in the sidelines
witnessing it before our eyes
But the worst part isnt the ending
its learning too adapt too someone completely different
and watching them transform
into someone they said they would never be
10:25 October 2, 2009
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8.
I try to sleep,
but nothing
I try to erase you from my thoughts,
but nothing
I try to unlove you,
if anything,
Nothing…
9:41 October 2, 2009
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9.
As i lay here
on this bed
i close my eyes
but only you is what i see
the clock ticks
but no sound
my heart beats
but not for you.
not anymore..
As the numbers display a countdown
the minutes feel like hours
and the stillness
made it feel like forever
forever is my love for you
but you wouldnt understand
because, like my heartbeat,
loveing you is involentary
9:39 October 2,2009
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10.
His name is a cobbweb to my memories
my love and thoughts of him
for him
were lost.
he should have hidden the now revealed evidence
that i was just an experimnt
and honestly,
im nothing to him
though he was everything to me…
10:56 September 29,2009
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11.
America is the promiselands they say
they pray to come here someday
its where the riches lye,
where everything is right.
but eventually they will find,
its not always greener on the other side.
9:28 September 24,2009
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12.
You make a fire burn
12.
You make a fire burn in my heart
a song in my head i can never forget
a list of things i love about you
stuck on replay in my mind
you make me want to scream to the sky,
smile in my sleep
and laugh when i want to cry
you make me at my happiest when you visit my thoughts,
and my worst when you haunt them
and the thing im scared of most,
is that i wont be able to let go
if you do go
9:43 September 22, 2009

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There is much more but it will not fit. If you email me, I can give you the rest.

5 and #9, course that may just be because they speak to me; they sound almost exactly like how I feel and have been feeling for the last 2 months. Read these questions I posted, you’ll figure it out…you can even answer the 2nd one, I’d like it if you did too.

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20091018152727AAkxcYF

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Ar3FEezcNvYkPue1s6zAffwjzKIX;_ylv=3?qid=20091112150641AAs1Ucb

I have to write a different beginning for the book, Evermore, by Alyson Noel. I was wondering if this (my first draft) is good or not..? Please tell me what I can fix, please!

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I rushed to get to class on time, darting quickly in and out of students, careful to avoid their touch. They were all engulfed in their own auras that were swirling and reaching out to me. I reached into my pocket to turn up my I-pod and drown out everyone’s thoughts. I pushed open the door to Mr. Robin’s room and headed toward my seat in the back of the room. I narrowly avoided Stacia’s bag that was conveniently placed in my path and glared at her as I passed. She murmured "Loo-ser" whereas her thoughts were much worse.

Closing my eyes, I turned down my music and leaned back in my seat, thinking about my past. Back to the time when I had a sister, a mom, a dad, and a lab named Buttercup. When my life was absolutely perfect. But before the time when I was naive enough to cause the death of them all.

I cringed as the memories flooded back to me, vivid as if they had just happened. Ever since the accident, my life’s been the opposite of what it used to be.

We were in the back of my dad’s SUV, laughing at a joke Riley had just told. Buttercup wagged her tail happily, as if she were laughing along with us. The next thing I knew, I was staring at the wrecked car from the outside, wondering if I was the only one to get out safely. I looked around my surroundings as sirens started to fill the air. I saw my mom, dad, Riley, and Buttercup running off into a forest, smiling and laughing happily. I turned to run after them, but got distracted. I was in a small, misty clearing in the woods. Everything was so alluring, calling me to it. It took me a few moments to realize that I should go after them again. But it was too late. I yelled for them, desperately searching but finding nothing.

I dropped to my knees as a dark, burning feeling swallowed me. I yelled out for help, crying for someone, anyone to help me. But no one came, and I fell to the grass floor. My thoughts swirled around me as I tried to figure out what was going on. I heard a muffled voice calling to me, beckoning to come back.

I broke the surface, back to the pain and burning. Then I heard someone say, "Ever, is that your name? Open your eyes and look at me."

My eyelids fluttered and I gazed into dark unfamiliar eyes. I managed to mutter "I’m Ever." before being swallowed by the dark again.
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It’s for a school project, so I want it to be as good as I can get it xP

Yeah, it looks good. I like the fact that you didn’t try to rewrite the story- just the way the story is unfolded. It meshes well with the actual book. Best suggestion is to stick as closely as possible to the actual description and wording of the book when possible- try to replicate the author’s style, because she tells the story best.

Here is a cute poem I found
Anyone have any they’d like to share? I love the baby poems!

Mother’s Heart

I loved you from the very start,
You stole my breath, embraced my heart.
Our life together has just begun
You’re part of me my little one.
As mother with child, each day I grew,
My mind was filled with thoughts of you.

I’d daydream of the things we’d share,
Like late-night bottles and Teddy bears.
Like first steps and skinned knees,
Like bedtime stories and ABC’s.
I thought of things you’d want to know,
Like how birds fly and flowers grow.

I thought of lessons I’d need to share,
Like standing tall and playing fair.
When I first saw your precious face,
I prayed your life be touched with grace.
I thanked the angels from above,
And promised you unending love.

Each night I lay you down to sleep,
I gently kiss your head and cheek.
I count your little fingers and toes;
I memorize your eyes and nose.
I linger at your nursery door,
Awed each day I love you more.

Through misty eyes, I dim the light,
I whisper, "I love you" every night.
I loved you from the very start,
You stole my breath, embraced my heart.
As mother and child our journeys begin,
My heart’s yours forever my little man.

Whoever has written it, it is EXCELLENT. It is full of emotions.